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a review on JCK submitted by jck2.
your flow sounds real dated, the lyrics are ok, you need to work on your sylables, you're stretchin to hit the beat. has frat boy rap written all over it. the mix is rough, also too much mid/lows, not enough highs. the hook is really annoying to me, the ryhthm is really repetative and the voice you do is not pleasant. sorry bro. drums are ok, better than some. mood is just not there for me (well, the beat is moody). sequencing was average
- narsty from Brooklyn, New York on 16Apr2007
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not bad
has that rock feel to it, not many can pull that off good but this song did. Good subject matter. Sequencing is excellent, but the hook kinda throws off the mood. Drums fit the song.
- wordsmyths from New Orleans, Louisiana on 10Apr2007
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keep up the good work
wow this track is tight vocals tempo melody is cool laid back you can just chill to.
- brangreen78 from Santa Maria, California on 10Apr2007
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Good!!
Really good over all!! Cool lyrics!! I like what your doin here...here is my constructive critisism:
-The beat is very quiet, not very powerful
-Seems like great care was taken in the sound of the voice....relax, let up and flow with it a little more, it seems "forced" if that makes any sense
-Keep up the good work!
- Funk_Fu from Salt Lake City, Utah on 8Apr2007
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Message
I respect the fact that you are not rapping about bullshit. I like the message. I like the vocals there delived well w a geat tone. I am not the biggest fan of the hook. I would like a different hook. Still all in all you got a fan in me.
- slipsicknot from Birmingham, Alabama on 8Apr2007
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Painful
This sounds pretty unfinished and flat, kinda like a demo rather than a finished piece. I'm waiting for this to go somewhere but it doesn't. The rapping is not that great either.
Drums: Too much in the background and not as powerful as they could be
Mood: Not existing
Sequencing: Kinda all over the place...needs lots of work
All I can say is that this is pretty painful to listen to.
- Pixelfrog from Novato, California on 6Apr2007
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Western Child
Drums - Mediocre...
Mood - puts me in a mad mood...Rage against the machine type...
Sequencing - Good sequencing, I would use a little quantize on the beat
- ThaOriginaCnote from Tempe, Arizona on 6Apr2007
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depress me with the thought
i found the mood depressing but i did like the vocal hook or chorus the mood is set with the lyric and the music in which i'm sure your after but hey if you put a silver lining in that nuke cloud i would of liked it better
- lintrap from Toronto, Ontario, Canada on 5Apr2007
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hunh?
this is not hip hop its in the wrong genre i cant rate it really i do like the lyrics though and hook is hot its deferent but i could fuck wit it
- YOUNGNHEARTLESS from Atlanta, Georgia on 4Apr2007
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What?
This is horrible. Over and over. Again and again. And the chorus just put the nail in the coffin.
- PharoahStreets from Cleveland, Ohio on 3Apr2007
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The new melinium
The drums on this track are cool, nice mood and melody, the entire arrangement is kinda choppy as a hole needs more time spent on overall vocal arrangment and delivery, the sequence is pretty solid and well done! Good Job!! "J" www.legendquestrecords.com
- LEGENDQUEST from Phoenix, Arizona on 2Apr2007
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Ok Beat and lyrics match to set mood
Drums are ok but could use improvment maybe try a different instrument to do similar effect.
Beat and lyrics are on point to set the overall mood. Mood overall is too despressing and political for my personal taste.
- CommonRedKnow from Alliance, Ohio on 1Apr2007
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nice
okay is nice wowowowoow ok ok ok ok ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo okay is nice wowowowoow ok ok ok ok ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
- knuckz from Far Rockaway, New York on 1Apr2007
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very concious
The song is great, I really like the concept. People need to hear things like this every once in a while in order to keep them aware of what's really going on. That being said....
1. The DRUMS are on point, has that old school DJ Premier feel. They sound very authentic, like the producer actually played the drums.
2. The MOOD is a little bit chilling. It kind of makes you a little hopeless, but at the same time this is the correct mood to portray in order for the listener to get the message.
3. The SEQUENCING is pretty good, there are a few times (1-2) when you peak. Other than that it sounds good to me.
Good song, keep it up. I would love to hear more of this.
- SBE from Tallahassee, Florida on 29Mar2007
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Track is OK
I feel where you going with the track. The beat needs to be more musical. I feel the concept. Track is OK
- jondo9 from Tulsa, Oklahoma on 28Mar2007
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dark political rap ummm!
feeling the lyrics, the beats not bad something you might bump in your car more than in the club some potential for hit status tighten up the beat.
- EUGOD from Marietta, Georgia on 27Mar2007
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Industrial groove
Original lyrics, smooth flow in and out of base beat. Needs clearification on meaning of white cloud and place in the flow of things but nice sound.
- melvin_j11 from North West, Florida on 26Mar2007
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ur song
1-drums are fine. nice lil bump/ knock to 'em, lil repetitive in some parts but notta big problem.
2-mood is dark. matches the flows on each verse. lyrics are different, like mc's who take risks. this isn't a typical rap song...more meaning to it and purpose.
3-sequencing is fine. track works man. don't sweat that at all. the arrangement works for the overall sound (verse/ chorus/ verse, etc).
- TripleNickels35 from Philadelphia, Pennsylvania on 26Mar2007
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the production is quite rough!!!
i find this track quite boring but thats not to say that you cant rap.
i feel the beat dosent help try scraping that 1 and use somthing a bit more professional. keep trying .
- DYellZ from Nw London, United Kingdom on 26Mar2007
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Your song....
1. Drums...
Drums are ok. Decent at best. Not really a domiant drum loop that defines hip-hop songs.
2. Mood...
Mood is confrontational to me. It sounds like your angry about something. However your not really talking about anything. This ismore a song to display your ability to rhyme. Not your ability to get across main points of view. In other words focus more on your storyline and less on your lyrics. After you got a storyline then go back and change lyrics up then to match song.
3. Sequencing...
Sequencing is decent but nothin to jump up and down about. The arrangement is the way it should be.
- pimpen_syn from Garland, Texas on 26Mar2007
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gud mood
nice mood 2 this ,but lyrics r to slow man,sounds not well thought out or planned,could hv done so much more with this
- dj42floor from Leamington, United Kingdom on 26Mar2007
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